Ben Sorensen

English 1A

Fleischer

6 March 2014

MWF 9-9:50

SWA 3/5 Peer Review Follow-up

            I read JB’s paper and he wrote about the different types of texts that are involved with his topic of head injuries in football. He chose a YouTube clip of a player getting a concussion, a picture of a player getting his helmet knocked off and an article about head injuries.

            For the most part, JB gave me really good feedback on my essay. He said that even though I didn’t label them, he knew exactly what part of the prompt I was writing about. He also said that he likes how personal I get in part B. the one thing JB said I needed fixing was my works cited page because I didn’t even have one.

            I really do agree with JB’s comment and find them to be helpful. He gave me a lot of positive feedback and that helps me to know what I'm doing right. I would’ve liked to hear more things that I can work on though. In my revision I would definitely listen to JB’s feedback and make a works cited page because it is one of the requirements on the prompt.